English Essay Practice: Banning Pokemon GO①
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English Essay Practice: Banning Pokemon GO①

2016-08-03 11:00

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    I started this blomaga to enhance my English writing. I'm studying for the next EIKEN Grade 1 scheduled on October 10, 2016. In every article, I set one topic debatable, and then I write both an affirmative opinion and a negative one.
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    Topic: Pokemon Go should be banned from sightseeing spots.

    [Affirmative view]

    -Notes in brainstorming

    ・dangerous in walking and using smart phones
    ・Analysis of sightseeing: high risk of troubles because sightseeing spots gather many people.
    ・Analysis of Pokemon Go: Absorbing. No look ahead, then collide.
    ・People in sightseeing spots don't simply hope that many people come and drop money, but that know excellences of their districts. Those who only do Pokemon Go and aren't interested in sightseeing are not welcome.

    -Structure of essay
    1. Claim: Affirmative from the two points, dangerous (and no benefit)
    2. What's Pokemon GO?
    3. What are sightseeing spots?
    4. Walking Pokemon Go is dangerous.
    *5. Some may think a lot of people gathering in the spots benefit the local, but it's not true because people indifferent of sightseeing are not welcome.
    6. Conclusion.

    (main sentences)
     It's better for Pokemon Go users not to exist in sightseeing spots. In this essay, first I make two necessary analyses about Pokemon Go and sightseeing spots. Next, with them, I will claim why Pokemon Go should be banned from the point of view that it is dangerous.

     Pokemon Go is so absorbing that its users don't look ahead at all. All they do is concentrate on the tiny virtual screen of their smart phone. They don't care where they are walking or who and what are around them in the real world. When a pokemon appears, they go for it by any means even though into fire, water, weeds, a skirt of girls and so on.

     Sightseeing spots gather a lot of people with its historical, cultural, entertaining or other attracts, and on holydays they are heavily crowded with many kinds of people. For example, Tokyo Disney Land welcomes children, parents, Japanese or foreigners. Even if you hold your girl or boyfriend by the hand, a dense stream of people might prevent you from tying your lover and yourself, and you would have trouble looking for him or her in the crowd.

     Considering the two features above, it is clear what happens if a number of Pokemon Go freaks rush to a sightseeing spot. Collision accidents are inevitable. Although ordinary visitors watch for their front, they don't have any eye back and Pokemon Goers have no eye in any direction, and then there is no way for the humans who cannot search objects by sonaring around to avoid collision. Many will be injured.

     Absolutely, both Pokemon Go and sightseeing must be enjoyable. Collision accidents break their joy totally. No getting close each other is the best way in their spending joyful time.

    (297 words)


    At first, I had in mind the fifth argument about commercial effect of Pokemon Go on sightseeing spots. But if it was written, the length of the essay became too long, so I cut it.


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