English Essay Practice: Japan's Low Birthrate Necessarily Raised?②



English Essay Practice: Japan's Low Birthrate Necessarily Raised?②

2016-08-16 11:00

    I started this blomaga to enhance my English writing. I'm studying for the next EIKEN Grade 1 scheduled on October 10, 2016. In every article, I set one topic debatable, and then I write both an affirmative opinion and a negative one.

    TOPIC: Does more need to be done to address Japan's low birthrate? (from EIKEN on January 2013)

    [Negative View]

    -Notes in brainstorming

    ・(Abandoned idea)Like one-childe policy of the PRC, population policy might worsen the country.

    ・Rather than low birthrate, there exist more serious problems, for example those about aged people. The former is about not born humans, but the latter is about living people, which must be considered firstly.

    ・The countermeasures will be meaningless in the present situation where young people cannot afford to having babies due to lack of money.

    ・Worry about counter reputation toward couples without child. Their lifestyle is one that should be respected. No one can blame them.

    -Structure of essay
    Explain one by one from the top claim.

    (Main Sentences)
     I do not think that carrying out some countermeasures against Japan's low birthrate is good, but rather it is bad for society. Here is my view from three aspects: other meaningful usage of tax, no effect of the countermeasure, and evil reputation toward no-child couples.

     First, Japan's low birthrate is not a very urgent matter, and tax should be used for more serious one. One example is that the number of aged people is increasing. They need more nursing homes, more helpers to survive or so. This is a problem about people who are alive, while that of low birthrate is about those who have not born yet. The first priority should be put on living people.

     Second, I believe that there will be no effect even if a certain step against low birth is taken. That is because now Japanese young people are little willing to have babies due to lack of money, which has generated from a prolonged recession. It is only after monetary anxiety has disappeared when the young start to consider their family plan. In this sense, it is wise for the government to spend tax into economical policies, not into raising birthrate.

     Third, I am afraid that if Japan enthusiastically encourage people to have babies, it will be a wrong message to society. I mean counter discrimination toward couples who have no child. I think marriage without child is one lifestyle that is appreciated. There are many people in Japan who decide not to have babies on their own, or who cannot bear babies because of the physical order or so. None of them hopes to be socially criticized. As taking steps for raising birthrate might threaten people's dignity, I think the Japanese government had better have the courage to rethink.

     A political decisions involve various kinds of people and cost a lot of tax. If it should harshly do harm to society, it should not be adopted. Japan must make another more credible way.
    (334 words)

    Too many words. I again wrote the essay on paper first, and then copied on the screen. It took 30 minutes from the brainstorming. I think the time was fine. To shrink the length is homework.

    one-child-per-couple, one-child policy: 一人っ子政策
    step, measure, plan: 方策
    none of ~: 単数扱い