English Essay Practice: Should a brass-band club prioritize cheering in the Koshien?①



English Essay Practice: Should a brass-band club prioritize cheering in the Koshien?①

2016-08-27 11:00

    I started this blomaga to enhance my English writing. I'm studying for the next EIKEN Grade 1 scheduled on October 10, 2016. In every article, I set one topic debatable, and then I write both an affirmative opinion and a negative one.

    Topic: Should a brass-band club prioritize cheering the baseball club going to Koshien over joining their final contest?

    [Affirmative View]

    -Notes in brainstorming

    ・School's order is absolute

    ・Koshien is authorized > Brass-band contest

    ・Hot cheering is necessary

    (Main Sentences)
     I agree that if a high school asks the brass-band club to go to Koshien, the club should do it.

     First, the high school's order is absolute to all its clubs because they are subsidized by the school. So if some incident creats a clash of interests between two clubs, the high school, who makes students' activities possible, should makes a decision, even though it comes to affect whether the students can go to the inter-high stages.

     Second, which is more important to a high school, an inter-high game or a preceding contest to the final? Of course, the former is. Playing in the Koshien tournament, which is the last field of baseball clubs, gives a bigger fame to schools than performing in the local preliminary for brass-band clubs. High schools may well prioritize the Koshien.

     Third, instrumental support of a brass-band club is meaningful for the school in the Koshien. The Koshien is broadcast all over Japan. Wonderful musical performance with a lot of trained students makes the high school look prestige. A school with good reputation can invite more students, which will lead to healthy run of the school.

     To summarize, what is valuable for a school is also good for the students. Eventually, it is benefitial for students to behave for the sake of their school.
    (225 words)

    This topic was more difficult that I expected. I had to raise considerably many points to establish a solid logic. Additionally, the affirmative opinion is opposite to my real idea, so I felt unwilling to express it. But to pass the exam, I must concentrate on finding out which stance is more suitable.

    prioritize A over B: AをBに優先させる
    preliminary: 予選
    summarize: 要約する